Sep 12, 2011

Magpie Tales#82

Revenants


There'll come a day some day when you'll be there
again. Your eyes the same, the same small hands,
your brushed hair lifted by the night wind, laid
onto your shoulder bare. And you will say
"Now it is time, dear. We have waited long,
each in our place and time. And what was strong
between us we'll replay. Come now, come away."

And I? Lost between "You!" and "How?" and "Why?"
will half believe that you are no more ghost
than I, then, hesitating, know that we
both are ghosts now, and this, Eternity.


(Suggested by Tess Kincaid's picture-prompt for Magpie#82, and by another poem, "Revenant," remembered from my schooldays.)
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16 comments:

  1. Brian MillerSeptember 12, 2011 at 8:16 PM

    there is an elegance to your piece..i can only hope to meet again those i love one day...

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  2. Chronicles of IllusionsSeptember 12, 2011 at 10:50 PM

    This is really endearing

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  3. ReflectionsSeptember 12, 2011 at 11:52 PM

    Tender elegance waiting for that one moment far off in the distance... or is it truly that far off? Nice write.

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  4. MargaretSeptember 13, 2011 at 2:25 AM

    Very elegant. I read it out loud and loved the rhythm of this poem. Beautiful.

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  5. JinksySeptember 13, 2011 at 8:18 AM

    What better than a love story that lasts for eternity? The right place and the right time don't often come together any other way...Excellent poem full of pathos.

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  6. The BugSeptember 14, 2011 at 12:14 AM

    I can imagine the scene all too well - I wonder, if my beloved goes before me, if it will be he who calls me to the other side when my time comes...

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  7. Tumblewords:September 14, 2011 at 4:36 AM

    Eloquent and poignant. A fine read.

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  8. TrellissimoSeptember 14, 2011 at 7:19 AM

    Best I have read so far by a very long street.

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  9. Brandee ShaferSeptember 14, 2011 at 4:03 PM

    I love the hope you offer through this piece...

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  10. Lucy WestenraSeptember 15, 2011 at 7:13 AM

    A model! It's a change to read metrical poetry with assonances based on the sequence . .'day', 'same' 'away', 'laid', 'place', 'replay' etc. Your poem has all the things that poetry used to have before free-verse strangled the Muse.

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  11. gautami tripathySeptember 15, 2011 at 4:37 PM

    Loved it!
    This is SO good!

    an elusive world lurks

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  12. HelenSeptember 17, 2011 at 6:37 PM

    Head over heels, in love with your Magpie!!!

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  13. Tess KincaidSeptember 18, 2011 at 2:44 PM

    This is really beautiful...

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  14. Jingle Poetry At Olive GardenSeptember 19, 2011 at 3:03 AM

    smooth word flow,
    love the word play.
    graceful spirits.

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  15. UnknownJune 5, 2012 at 5:14 AM

    I rarely have time to read poems but I'm glad I read yours.

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  16. UnknownJune 5, 2012 at 5:16 AM

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WV's turned off. Glad to see this is catching on. I don't want my readers to work for nothing for folk whose OCR software doesn't work properly.

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