Feb 8, 2010

In Your Own Words


Four vowels comprise her name -
say deft, say kiss, dance, death -
four smoke rings, linked exemplars
of her faculty, her advocacy
and her carnal grammars.

To formulate the margins of her eyes,
four steps to duskfall, moonfall snared
to mirror her momentum and her style -
say topaz, amber, auburn, black -
her lip and boyish shoulder, archer's stance,
and one impatient gesture of disdain,
an earlobe tethered in a straying curl.
Laughable? Now say charm, say warm, was warm.

Or perhaps subsume her
in four fragrances, four dialects
abandoned but still braiding
here with then - orchid, Havana,
Lentherique, quinine - to wrench the noose,
affirm and reaffirm her.

Nothing is willed or planned or made
inevitable - ever, say is it ever? -
even by chance, by one too many faces
in a room - but somewhere
leaves ash to smoulder
as she left scents on gowns, in cars -
whisper October, whisper smoke and gold -
forsook her shoes by doors left open -
say go, don't go, grown old -
or charred the lips of unfamiliar tables
with her frank, familiar,
discarded black cigars.

16 comments:

  1. This paints a picture as inscrutable as a Salvador Dali painting.

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  2. I see black and white film movie star. Very noir.

    Dark

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  3. Nessa - you mean like Tallulah Bankhead?

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  4. I got a Greta Garbo - don't know why, but I suppose that's the beauty of poetry. It's the magic!

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  5. Nessa, Jinksy, Denise . . I would love to know, if you can remember, whether a particular word or words invoked the film actresses, or whether this association arose out of the whole poem. Anyone figure out that she was an "Elizabeth"? Note for Jinksy! I couldn't possibly use the name . . because to me . . . Elizabeth is just about as unpoetic as a woman's name can get. (Noooo . . maybe Agnes trumps it!)

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  6. Doc! What about St Agnes' Eve?? A very poetic poem. And did you know that Agnes is deemed an unlucky name in Scotland, so the name is oft reversed to 'Senga'??
    I'm afraid I wasn't bright enough to find 'Elizabeth' - although in hindsight, I can now see the process - but the film actress imagery was there especially in the second stanza,and the masculine references put me in mind of the 1920/30s era.Sophisticated, observational and chic!

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  7. her lip and boyish shoulder, archer's stance,
    and one impatient gesture of disdainan,
    an earlobe tethered in a straying curl

    The description fits my image of Tallulah...

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  8. You are all both very kind. Just shows how folk respond differently to pomes.

    Denise. No, I didn't know Agnes was considered unlucky in Scotland, though I did know it was often reversed to Senga.

    Jinksy. All I remember of Tallulah is the name! But then . . we was too poor to afford the picture houses . . .

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  9. Must point out, I was too young to see Tallulah Bankhead in a cinema - only the joy of old films on TV let me get aquainted with her.

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  10. This poem contains mystery, seduction and glamour.
    I can't imagine who the seductress is..you've left clues of gin and black sobranies.I like her anyway and I like your poem and taste in women!

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  11. A complex babe..no doubt about that..but then, aren't we all?
    Go, don't go? ..ah, that is the question!

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  13. I found this intriguing and a worthy poem, real or imaginary, of any woman.

    I like the repetition in the form, and the contrast in the themes, not all nice, not all goodbyes,

    Thank you for sharing your writing, and thanks for visiting my site. How much is exercising the pen, and giving birth to art I have yet to figure out. But I will try not to waste electrons on cyberspace....

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  14. Dianne . . that's interesting. It could be that giving birth to art comes out of exercising the pen. I often don't see that the words are saying until I write them down.

    All good wishes

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  15. Rallentanda . . remember that I am over 200 years old (See profile), This poem was writting over 100 years ago. I don't think you find women like E******* these days. She was Exreme Snowballing gold medallist in the 1908 Winter Olympics just joking. That you like the poem is encouraging. Thank you.

    Lyn . . thank you for visiting. Like all complex creatures, she had both real and imaginary parts. (Maths "joke", Rallentanda zapps me for them!)

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  16. This was lovely.
    I enjoyed the flow of the words, the mystery of the woman and the elegance of days gone by when women smelled nice and smoking a cigarette was gauche. Somehow it reminded me of Bogart and Casablanca :)

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WV's turned off. Glad to see this is catching on. I don't want my readers to work for nothing for folk whose OCR software doesn't work properly.