Sep 9, 2010

SHRIEK





















That Thing passed through my window
as if no glass were there,
my window just like air. And now
the Thing is out there, waiting –
Child, we say ‘by’ not ‘through’.
a window. What thing?
I seemed to hear it shriek -
and look at its gloomy cowl.
I cannot see which way it faces -
the stars, or scowling in at me.
Oh, don’t remove your cowl,
you Thing, so still and silent.
I will be good if you don’t lift your cowl.
You Silly! Are you fevered?
It was you who shrieked. You had
a silly dream. And what’s this cowl?
Let me feel your brow . .
Don’t . . don’t let it touch me! Don’t
let the Thing come in.
Enough .Go back to  sleep. Why do you stare
so at the window? There’s nothing there.
Only the trees and stars.  It stood
by my bed where you are. It’s awful hand 
appeared from under its white cloak.
Its fingers were all bone. They pointed,
pointed their bones at me. And then it shrieked.
Bone fingers! Tut! What nonsense!
Now, lie down again. You are quite
shaking.  I wish I had curtains
so it could not see.  Do you think
Things like that can pass through curtains?
Really, Child! Goodnight!
Oh please, please - don’t put out the light!
Please, don’t put out the light.


23 comments:

  1. Hah! I dig it.

    Lovecraft by way of Silverstein!

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  2. If you say it's out there, I believe it!! Cowl, or no..you've got that magic touch!!

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  3. Night frights. Monsters under the bed. And, in the closet. Boney death's beckoning finger. It's a dangerous road - growing up.

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  4. Spooky. It reminds me of my little nephew that told his dad, "there are scary monsters out there!" in his sweet, sincere four year old voice.

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  5. oooh scary piece! Good scary Magpie!

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  6. I believe you. It was there. Not a doubt.

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  7. Sounds as if you've stayed the night at Willow Manor! Nice piece.

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  8. The bony fingers would have had me pertrified, without anything else! But I'm not sure whether a light bulb would have been enough to make me feel brave - might have taken a few cuddles from a non-boney fingered human to make me feel secure. Literally, a haunting Magpie.

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  9. Great piece, lovely rhythm to it, there are a lot of bony fingers around this weeks magpies.

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  10. I think there's a subtext. Doctor FTSE, did you intend readers to understand that the child had a nightmare parent as well as a bad dream? Fancy "tut-tutting" a Little One who is shaking with fear, then switching off the light.

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  11. Wonderful magpie! Excellently crafted magpie! =)

    -Weasel

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  12. i can relate to this one....great magpie! :-)

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  13. shivers...the things we see in the night...even scarier when others can not see them...very nice mag!

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  14. Oh dear, I remember having nights like this as a child. A great take on the Magpie.

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  15. Thank you one and all for these kind and encouraging comments.

    Mrs.Trellis . . your comment will be directed to my eMail and I will reply to the point of interpretation that you raise here by eMail. I can say that in early drafts of the poem, the parent appeared to be much kinder to the child in it's plight.

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  16. Excellent! I remember being sick as a child, and the bear that was walking on a cobweb strand connecting my bed to a chair--and something terrible was going to happen if the cobweb broke. You did a great job of capturing childhood terror.

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  17. this was a lot of fun. I read it out loud.
    it's funny were your imagination takes you.

    Rene

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  18. Oooo nice and scary...boney fingers and all ... good one for halloween....bkm

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  19. If any commenters look in again . . .
    I've read quite a lot of the Magpie entries from this picture prompt. I now see that the photo is taken from OUTSIDE the room. The figure is INSIDE the room and the trees are REFLECTED in the window glass.
    Well . . well . . well . . and there was me thinking it was taken from INSIDE the room and the figure was OUTSIDE and because the trees are visible THROUGH the figure, the figure must be a GHOST of a dream image. Hmmm . . . must try harder!

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WV's turned off. Glad to see this is catching on. I don't want my readers to work for nothing for folk whose OCR software doesn't work properly.