Oct 20, 2010

Magpie Tales#37

Thanks once more to Willow for a prompt to reflect upon.


Last Night

This is where they lead, the wordless bargains
struck for this brief respite from despair.
Muttered endearments, dear to neither, fall
between these bought, uncaring lips and mine
onto these rented pillows. But ever,
with the act that’s no more than acting done
and the bedside clock sheds desolation
drop by drop, another’s breath is heard
in the sleepless dark. Yes, all unbidden
another whispers of an older passion
never mirrored in its simulacrum,
however red the mouth, however sweet
the practised kisses, however loving
seem the unloving arms. Then these tossed sheets
cannot spread wide enough to dry my tears.


20 comments:

  1. Beautiful!Loved the way you have ended the poem.

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  2. you call it love, but it's really not at all..it's just business

    wonderful magpie...very powerful

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  3. Loved the masterful use of language here, especially in "bedside clock sheds desolation drop by drop," and I'm looking up "simulacrum" next. I love reading poetry like this that teaches me something new with each reading.

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  4. Masterful piece of business played out in desolation.

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  5. Sad way of picturing a professional relationship...very intense!
    ps - regarding my magpie (CastaZero): the end of the tale is not a poem, is just the final lyrics of a famous song from the 70's -Hotel California - that I thought was a good reference for the story. Thanks a lot for your comment!

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  6. "never mirrored in its simulacrum"


    I love this line!

    mirror at crossroads

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  7. And yet we are all people...past wanting the "real thing"? You write with great truth, saddness...

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  8. 'Muttered endearments, dear to neither, fall
    between these bought, uncaring lips and mine
    onto these rented pillows.'

    and ...

    'and the bedside clock sheds desolation
    drop by drop, another’s breath is heard
    in the sleepless dark.'

    What absolutely wonderful writing, so subtle and skilfull and full of story. I loved it.

    My Magpie

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  9. holy moly you're good at this game
    wonderful...now to go to the dictionary,Doc

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  10. A brief respite from despair on rented pillows
    seems hardly worth it.This sentiment is well
    expressed in your poem, Footsie.

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  11. a deftly worded comment on love bought...

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  12. sheets can not spread wide enough to dry tears,
    so powerful line here,
    beautiful crafted tale.

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  13. oh i love that last line...very nice magpie!

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  14. Wonderful take on the Mag. Nice write. Love and Light, Sender

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  15. agree the last line is a winner....reveals the magnitude of the sorrow....bkm

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  16. A brilliant way of capturing such overwhelming sorrow, as with your choice of words in the closing line of your poem. Just brilliant... I loved it!

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  17. this is killer, love the opening line,
    'This is where they lead, the wordless bargains...' drew me right in, the whole thing carrying me through. Def. like this style of yours.

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  18. Stellar piece of writing here. Damn, this one's good!

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  19. Everyone else is right -- great piece of writing. Heartbreaking in all the right ways, and with a nice hard underlying edge.

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WV's turned off. Glad to see this is catching on. I don't want my readers to work for nothing for folk whose OCR software doesn't work properly.