Oct 28, 2010

Magpie Tales#38

Willow offers writers another picture prompt this week, and invites more than one response if writers so wish.  Magpie writers' responses can be found HERE.














Two Poems

Memorials

Something in these slabs does not quite answer.
‘Beloved Husbands’ and ‘Beloved Wives’
chiselled in stone, overlooked by angel wings,
seek to commemorate lives shared, with bliss
the elexir of all their days.  This is
not what ephemeral records show –
their silences, rejections and the blows,
the loving husband’s dalliance, cards or drink,
the wife neglected, beaten if she thinks
to gainsay the Master of the House. Ask how
can such belovedness be buried here
interred alongside poverty, despair,
the loneliness that the ill-married share,
save that to the dead we must defer? These
grounds are no Elysian fields, rather
testaments to conflicts, tears and wounds,
till Death at last sets the survivor free,
but, visiting again in time unites -
the victor and the vanquished once more One.

Hired hands cut their pretences into stone.


After Six Days

Now lies her little casket in the ground,
six handswidths small, a hand for each brief day.
Six days their daughter’s gaze outshone their dawn.
Now is her mother’s life too short to mourn
her passing? Shall six days be her reward,
the Seventh to be given to her Lord?
Was it for this her mother lent her life
whose love will not now watch her flesh grow tall,
play with her puppy, knit a dolly’s shawl,
kiss ribboned letters, give her heart in thrall?

She learned the comfort of her mother’s breast.
She learned her fist could clutch her father’s thumb.
How could she know she gave more than she took?
How could she know they’d hardly bear to look
now on her pale, still face? Their tears nail down
the casket lid. Their grief might crack her stone.
Her life is ended here. Here two deaths start.

What else is there left now to break their hearts?


25 comments:

  1. My favorite lines:

    These
    grounds are no Elysian fields, rather
    testaments to conflicts, tears and wounds,
    till Death at last sets the survivor free,

    Until Death sets the survivor free... I totally understand this. By the way thank you for commenting on my poems last week.

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  2. I guess they are not a collective but individual stories
    told in stone
    many heartbreaking to read
    graveyards are a reflection of life
    some lived well, some lived badly
    some wasted.. some, oh, too short
    stories all stories of people who once walked the earth
    you are always fascinating to read Doc

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  3. Woah. Nice Mag. Love and Light, Sender

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  4. Never quite thought about it like that. But u r so right.

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  5. There are two sides to every story, to every stone along the way and at the end.

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  6. Such deep thoughts in this writing, pales all my efforts into insignificance.
    I am in awe of your writing.

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  7. Ouch.

    That closing line is a killer.

    There's power in this one.

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  8. Loved the thought behind this poem - the thing that noone wants to look at or acknowledge after one of the so-called beloved's dies. The final line strikes true.

    Awesome writing

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  9. This is post strikes a cord - well written!

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  10. This piece brings to mind a distant cousin of mine, and young 27 year old wife, who was most likely killed by her husband in rural Indiana in 1907. There was no trial, no murderer found. Excellent piece.

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  11. They call these remembrance stones.
    But they rather are forgetting ones,
    Smothering slabs.
    Some things are better forgottten
    And buried.

    That second poem is so, so, sad.

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  12. Both poems are beautiful. The first one speaks too much truth. (I observe my widowed mother-in-law. Then I think of my own marriage. Hum. I'll have to think some more.)

    The second poem is so sad. You depict the emotions so well.

    Your writing is wonderful. Great magpie.

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  13. "..Their tears nail down
    the casket lid. Their grief might crack her stone.
    Her life is ended here. Here two deaths start." Wonderful word-craft.

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  14. I added myself to follow your blog. You are more than welcome to visit mine and become a follower if you want to.

    God Bless You :-)

    ~Ron

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  15. til death sets the survivor free...wow.

    and the close is very tight...nicely done...

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  16. How true - everyone has a story to tell and a headstone does not reflect what took place between sunrise and sunset.

    Your Mag is awesome.

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  17. The first one says so well a thought that's been running through my mind after reading the 'love and light' obituary of a man who took his life. And the second one is a heart breaking piece. Both excellent work.

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  18. Love the line 'until Death sets the survivor free'... well written on this prompt.

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  19. Your "After Six Days" is a powerful poem. I particularly like the second line and the last three lines.

    The first poem seems overly cynical. Every marriage has stresses, but not all have tyrants nor infidelity (at least, not physically). Yet your poem would fit far too many marriages.

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  20. after six days breaks the heart and reminds us to live and cherish each day we are given... beginning before our first breaths. beautiful poem!

    Memorials reminds me so much of how i wonder about the lives when i see a few words etched in stones. i wonder about the lives and how they were... your poem Memorials is so nicely written...

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  21. Poignant, both. There are so many different stories beneath the stones.

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  22. Profound ... fascinating Magpie this week!

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  23. Both caused a reaction from me. The second one is still lingereing - probably always will. Thank you.

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  24. magnificent tale.

    powerful imagery...
    Glad to see you beam with two pieces.

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WV's turned off. Glad to see this is catching on. I don't want my readers to work for nothing for folk whose OCR software doesn't work properly.